hear me out
look, i see where you're headed.. it looks promising, to an extent. this animation lacked in many more ways than one. first off, the characters just stood there, the little "speak" icon was out of sync, the objects just sorta.. floated..... and.. clock movies are overdone. but i didn't penalize in the last part. the idea's a little shaky, but you can improve.
what you need is jolts. different shots, camera angles and such. that's what makes a flash entertaining.